Scud Fly
Scud Fly
A short poem, to make up for the long'un earlier. What do you think?
(Playing with imagery)
Halkidiki - Greece
I long for the splendour of the Mediterranean Sea
Where fire-flies seemingly dance on waves, happy and fancy free.
To gaze at skies, achingly blue, stretching to eternity.
Watch scattered cotton candy clouds scud teasingly out of reach
To feel the sun downy and warm as a summer-ripened peach,
As we stroll along the cliff-top and the singing shingle beach.
CS - I made the form up. I was playing with the use of much longer lines than usual, and three line rhyming - it was going to be longer, but I cut it short.
You really like to test yourself don't you...15 beat lines and end rhyme.
Below is the beat sequence as it sounded to me. Two words to me hurt your flow: seemingly on line 3 and achingly on line 4. That could be me though, however it would be easy to change. I think you would also find your flow better if you used internal rhyme in addition to end rhyme. Especially in the line length. 'Spendour' for your info is spelled wrong in our version! Splendor! You did achieve your imagery you were after!
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Scud Fly
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